- I like the different types of camera angles and shots you have used
- I like the plot
- The music adds to the scene
- The music doesnt fit the genre
- The natural lighting defeats the genre
Friday, 28 February 2014
First draft responses
We asked a couple of people in our class to give us some audience feedback, the responses we recieved were both good and bad:
Mrs D
An excellent first draft - completed early. Well done. You have some great camera shots and fragmentation of the killer. The end sequence makes it read like a trailer. There is some pixilation within the first tracking shot. Use more sound FX of wine etc. Some continuity issues with the wine and strawberries. More work on mes costumes etc. Some lighting problems towards the end. I'm really impressed. Better motion of titles, film ident.
Our Draft
This is our first draft, we are very pleased with the way it has turned out because we know what we need to include in the final peice to further improve it.
What we have been up too:
During yesterdays lesson with Mrs Dolby, Me, Ruby and Eoghain went back to my house and began to film the draft. The draft took us about 20 minutes to film and the rest of the time we sat down and discussed all the different things that we could include to improve the opening sequence and draft. We were very pleased with the outcome of the draft, it looked really good and we had a clear understanding of how our final peice would be like.
The XX music confirmation
This is written evidence from an email we recieved from Emma Lomas, this hereby grants us permission to use their song during our opening scene of our short media clip.
Wednesday, 26 February 2014
Mrs D
Well done on your storyboard. I like the music and the pace works well. I would recommend going back to the exam criteria and checking that you have covered everything like a range of camera shots and framing. You need to also think about the length - it is currently very short and rethinking your titles as it reads a bit like a short film at present.
Friday, 21 February 2014
Mrs Dobbs
Well done Max. There is lots of detail here and you have got some good ideas. Please add more technical detail as requested by Miss Dolby and get your animatronics on your blog ASAP. I look forward to seeing some filming soon.
Thursday, 13 February 2014
Wednesday, 12 February 2014
What we did once we discussed our audience feedback (max)
Once we had discussed about our audience feeback we came to the conclusion that we were going to make the genre of the film Thriller/Horror. We did this because our audience feedback told us that they were confused about the genre of the film, therefore by changing the genre we hope that it is now clear to our viewers. There were many concepts of horror in our storyboard and we realized that there was little action that we could include, also action movies usually have very high budgets and we have a little one.
We are including a basement in our thriller/horror movie this instantly portays a horror movie, this is why we now feel confident about filming a thriller/horror movie. Other feedback that we recieved said that we are trying to include too much in a 2 minute time gap, we have discussed it as a group and planned the shots we are going to use and how long they are going to last for. We are going to include a number of different shots that look suspicisous and scary and we will try and make the duration of the shot add to the atmopshere of the shots being used.
We are including a basement in our thriller/horror movie this instantly portays a horror movie, this is why we now feel confident about filming a thriller/horror movie. Other feedback that we recieved said that we are trying to include too much in a 2 minute time gap, we have discussed it as a group and planned the shots we are going to use and how long they are going to last for. We are going to include a number of different shots that look suspicisous and scary and we will try and make the duration of the shot add to the atmopshere of the shots being used.
Audience feedback (max)
We recieved both positive and negative feedback from our audience. However, i dont see the negative feedback as negative, i see it as constrcutive critisim. I believe that we can now improve our short clip because we cant improve the bits that the audience didnt like.
We received feedback from both males and females. The male said that our idea reminds them of dexter. Dexter starts off with a guy making food, but the process of making food relates to death (metal blender spinning fast blending coffee) this is what we have tried to include in our opening clip. We also have to prioritse our idea.
The females liked our idea becuase they said the storyline is gripping and they want to know whats happening next. We need to have a clear sense of genre, good illusion to lighting - upstairs and basement idea, shadows and fragmenting.
We received feedback from both males and females. The male said that our idea reminds them of dexter. Dexter starts off with a guy making food, but the process of making food relates to death (metal blender spinning fast blending coffee) this is what we have tried to include in our opening clip. We also have to prioritse our idea.
The females liked our idea becuase they said the storyline is gripping and they want to know whats happening next. We need to have a clear sense of genre, good illusion to lighting - upstairs and basement idea, shadows and fragmenting.
Thursday, 6 February 2014
Tuesday, 4 February 2014
Miss D
Some detailed analysis her of the RMAs- make sure you are being as technical as possible and you may want to sum up what you've learnt from your anlysis in terms of common or effective features- do any openings challenge convebtions?
Shortlist of potenetial ideas for our movie (ruby)
Idea 1 –thriller/crime drama
Characters:the accused, a detective and a murdered victim
Story line: scene stars with a flashback of a murdered victim, covered in blood etc. in the house. Scene cuts to the interrogation room with the detective asking “why did you do it”.Another flashback to the house, of the woman before she died screaming at something off screen. Flashback to the interrogation room focusing on the accused man, wearing a white shirt covered in blood. He says “I didn’t do it”.Flashback to the outside of the house, man running out with blood on his hands and shirt (camera focuses on his hands then follows up his body to his face). Then goes back to the interrogation room > detective: “we found your prints all over the weapon” flashback to a knife lying next to the victim, covered in blood. Back to the interrogation room > accused: “it all happened so fast”detective: “why don’t you just start from the beginning?” [END OF FILM] Very basic dark toned lighting in interrogation room. Dramatic music at time of flashbacks.
IDEA 3 –thriller/crime drama
Use initial ideas 1 and 2 but combine them > use the same setting and characters as idea 1, use flashbacks as suggested in idea 2 to when/how the girl was taken. Use props such as rope etc. to indicate a flashback whenever the camera focuses on it. Use the same ending as idea 2.
Setting: normal family home > kitchen > scene finishes in basement.
Characters: an innocent female victim and a male ‘bad guy’ > we never see his face until the very last shot.
Storyline: The camera focuses on the man’s back as he opens his front door and walks through his house and into the kitchen. He’s whistling along to the radio. All seems normal, lighting is very natural. Camera continues to focus on his back until he goes to the door of the basement and slowly opens the door. Camera changes to focus on his feet as he goes down the steps into his basement > at this point we begin to hear a faded groan from something in the basement. Very dim lighting. Camera focus’ on the back of his head and shoulders – revealing more about the character – he’s walking towards something. Camera changes to focus on a girl sitting in a chair, with her feet and hands tied, wearing a blindfold and with duct tape covering her mouth. He rips off the duct tape and disappears completely from the frame, focusing on the girl. She’s crying > screaming “what do you want” “who are you” etc. The man comes back into the frame, standing behind her, and the camera cuts to a close up of his face. Finishes with a dramatic line from the man and then there’s a blackout. [END OF FILM]
Characters: an innocent female victim and a male ‘bad guy’ > we never see his face until the very last shot.
Storyline: The camera focuses on the man’s back as he opens his front door and walks through his house and into the kitchen. He’s whistling along to the radio. All seems normal, lighting is very natural. Camera continues to focus on his back until he goes to the door of the basement and slowly opens the door. Camera changes to focus on his feet as he goes down the steps into his basement > at this point we begin to hear a faded groan from something in the basement. Very dim lighting. Camera focus’ on the back of his head and shoulders – revealing more about the character – he’s walking towards something. Camera changes to focus on a girl sitting in a chair, with her feet and hands tied, wearing a blindfold and with duct tape covering her mouth. He rips off the duct tape and disappears completely from the frame, focusing on the girl. She’s crying > screaming “what do you want” “who are you” etc. The man comes back into the frame, standing behind her, and the camera cuts to a close up of his face. Finishes with a dramatic line from the man and then there’s a blackout. [END OF FILM]
IDEA 2 –thriller/crime drama
Setting: an interrogation room and a house.Characters:the accused, a detective and a murdered victim
Story line: scene stars with a flashback of a murdered victim, covered in blood etc. in the house. Scene cuts to the interrogation room with the detective asking “why did you do it”.Another flashback to the house, of the woman before she died screaming at something off screen. Flashback to the interrogation room focusing on the accused man, wearing a white shirt covered in blood. He says “I didn’t do it”.Flashback to the outside of the house, man running out with blood on his hands and shirt (camera focuses on his hands then follows up his body to his face). Then goes back to the interrogation room > detective: “we found your prints all over the weapon” flashback to a knife lying next to the victim, covered in blood. Back to the interrogation room > accused: “it all happened so fast”detective: “why don’t you just start from the beginning?” [END OF FILM] Very basic dark toned lighting in interrogation room. Dramatic music at time of flashbacks.
IDEA 3 –thriller/crime drama
Use initial ideas 1 and 2 but combine them > use the same setting and characters as idea 1, use flashbacks as suggested in idea 2 to when/how the girl was taken. Use props such as rope etc. to indicate a flashback whenever the camera focuses on it. Use the same ending as idea 2.
Moodboard 04/02/14 (ruby)
This is our moodboard, we have related our moodboard to the genre of our movie and the ideas that we have which we would like to include in our movie. We are doing a thriller and are involving fruits that are coloured like blood, knifes to represent death and roaps and bags to show danger.
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