Feedback taken into consideration - changes we'll make:

During Lunchtime this week, we had a quick group meeting in the atrium. We had a disucssion about the feedback we had recieved and how we are going to make our draft and film opening better.

The first bit of feedback we recieved was that the end of our draft made it feel a bit like a trailer instead of a film opening. We can change this by taking out the extreme clse up of eoghains lips when he says "Mr Lynch". Instead of putting this at the end we are now going to put it at the beginning so he introduces us to the name of the film. By doing this we hope it will make our film opening more of a film opening rather than a short trailer.

The second bit of feedback we recieved said that we should use more sound FX. We got told to use more sound FX so that the opening of the film felt more realistic rather than just having a sound track in the background. The sound FX we will use will be:

• The door slam behind him
• The wine pouring into the glass
• The cellar door opening
• A piece of metal drop on the floor in the cellar

By adding these sound FX in we hope that our film opening will feel more realistic.

At the beginning of our film, we followed Eoghain up the alleyway, and we noticed that there was a slight pixilation problem, this is where the picture quality was a bit blurry. We filmed the draft on Ruby's camera which wasnt very good. We will improve this by using a high quality camera in our final piece.

The mise en scene wasnt taken into consideration on our draft, this was because we were unsure on what Eoghain and Ruby should wear. Having filmed our draft we know have a clear understanding on what they should both wear in order to improve the final piece. Eoghain will wear a black suit to show that he is a normal business person, the first couple of scenes makes the man seem rather innocent but once he goes down into the cellar, that all changes. Ruby  is going to wear normal clothes, with a bag and rope over her head. Ruby is going to wear a bag over her head to show that she is being held hostage and it makes the scene feel very tense and scary.

We have taken the lighting into consideration because numerous people have said the bright lights take away the feel of the opening title, seeing as our genre Horror/Thriller. The lighting will be all dark so that the atmosphere of the film opening is made mysterious. The lighting will be quite dull, especially when we go down into the cellar.

The titles will be put in more smoothly and will be made noticable but not in great depth so that the audicence watch the film not the titles.